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This is the discussion page. Information that applies to all or a large majority of the sections belongs here, otherwise place information within corresponding discussion sections. | |||
== A comment on a goal to set for readability == | |||
I believe that this stub has language that is too complex for its purpose to explain the information to a general audience. More specifically, the sentences are long; while this does lead to including more information in fewer total words, it makes it more difficult to read. The current (today is Jan 18 2025) average word count of this stub is 24 words per sentence. I recommend the language be edited to reduce this average to fewer than 20. This may sound like a small and difficult change, but I believe it will make this information much more accessible to the public. I submit this comment as a potential example of a text with a more suitable average. | I believe that this stub has language that is too complex for its purpose to explain the information to a general audience. More specifically, the sentences are long; while this does lead to including more information in fewer total words, it makes it more difficult to read. The current (today is Jan 18 2025) average word count of this stub is 24 words per sentence. I recommend the language be edited to reduce this average to fewer than 20. This may sound like a small and difficult change, but I believe it will make this information much more accessible to the public. I submit this comment as a potential example of a text with a more suitable average. | ||
== Possible edit to improve readability EDIT Some practice notes on editing and observations == | |||
The following is unlikely to have the cite notes placed correctly as no attempt was made to do so. The language here is recommended to improve readability. I am no expert and many of these changes may make readability worse. Today is Jan 18 2025. | The following is unlikely to have the cite notes placed correctly as no attempt was made to do so. The language here is recommended to improve readability. I am no expert and many of these changes may make readability worse. Today is Jan 18 2025. | ||
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Also, I am planning to create one more discussion section in this discussion to see and test if and how the discussion sections can be reordered, and after that, if and how unnecessary discussion sections can be deleted (I plan to delete the one I add if possible and add any pertinent observations in this discussion section and after this note). | Also, I am planning to create one more discussion section in this discussion to see and test if and how the discussion sections can be reordered, and after that, if and how unnecessary discussion sections can be deleted (I plan to delete the one I add if possible and add any pertinent observations in this discussion section and after this note). | ||
EDIT 2: There is nothing wrong with the website, it just works in a way that I consider to be very strange. I have successfully merged and split different discussion sections. I know how to reorder discussion sections. Also, I am about to try to delete a test discussion section I made. If it is no longer there, then I did so successfully. Today is still Jan 18 2025. I am trying to include timing information for these edits as I think are appropriate, but I am also erring on the side of too much information, rather than too little. | |||