Talk:Disney wrongful-death lawsuit: Difference between revisions
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I believe that this stub has language that is too complex for its purpose to explain the information to a general audience. More specifically, the sentences are long; while this does lead to including more information in fewer total words, it makes it more difficult to read. The current (today is Jan 18 2025) average word count of this stub is 24 words per sentence. I recommend the language be edited to reduce this average to fewer than 20. This may sound like a small and difficult change, but I believe it will make this information much more accessible to the public. I submit this comment as a potential example of a text with a more suitable average. | I believe that this stub has language that is too complex for its purpose to explain the information to a general audience. More specifically, the sentences are long; while this does lead to including more information in fewer total words, it makes it more difficult to read. The current (today is Jan 18 2025) average word count of this stub is 24 words per sentence. I recommend the language be edited to reduce this average to fewer than 20. This may sound like a small and difficult change, but I believe it will make this information much more accessible to the public. I submit this comment as a potential example of a text with a more suitable average. | ||
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The following is unlikely to have the cite notes placed correctly as no attempt was made to do so. The language here is recommended to improve readability. I am no expert and many of these changes may make readability worse. Today is Jan 18 2025. | The following is unlikely to have the cite notes placed correctly as no attempt was made to do so. The language here is recommended to improve readability. I am no expert and many of these changes may make readability worse. Today is Jan 18 2025. | ||